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jarek2011
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Proofreading
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Can anyone proofread the text below and point to the mistakes that I made?
On Wednesday the 29th, lower-secondary school pupils from the Straumen School set out on a journey to Nordreisa which lies in the vicinity of the Reisa River. The Reisa River takes its origin from Lake R�isj�vri. The river flows from the lake at a distance of about 120km in the north-western direction and flows directly into Reisafjord at Storslett. The name of the river comes from Old Norse �risa� which literally means �a ladder� - probably because the water level in the river can rise suddenly. The Reisa River is also known for being abundant in fish, which attracts many fishing enthusiasts every year. But enough of these fun facts.
Day 1: On Wednesday morning students embarked on a journey from Lenangen/ Lenangsstraumen, and from there we drove to Nordreisa and up Reisadalen to a place called Saraelv. Here the boats were waiting for us and they took us about 20 km up the river. When the boats dropped us off, we had to cover on foot a distance of 3 km before we arrived at Nedrefosshytta � the tourist lodge where we were about to stay. Most of the first trip day was spent on getting to Saraelv, boat ride and walking to the cabin. As the evening drew closer it was high time for cooking. Shortly after, as soon as the students made a bonfire, we were barbecuing and enjoying the evening.
Day 2: The next day we headed up towards the mighty Mollisfossen. In the spring, when the snow melts, the height of the waterfall rises up to 269 meters, which puts the waterfall right on the top in respect to other European waterfalls. On the way up to the valley towards Mollisfossen, the students as well as the teachers were fascinated by the stunning scenery and the steep mountain ridges. The ascent itself took us about two hours, but when we finally arrived at the place and saw the falls we realized that the two hours of climbing really paid off. On the top of the mountain we had lunch, took pictures and enjoyed ourselves. Having seen Mollisfossen we were ready for the descent towards Nedrefosshytta, where we stayed for the night. Once we safely arrived at the cabin, the students took to cooking and woodcutting.
Day 3: After two days in the beautiful scenery of Reisadalen we were ready to head home. We walked for about two kilometers down the river, and finally, we were picked up by the boats there. The boats took us safely down to Saraelv, where we were picked up by a minibus and taken home to Nord Lenangen.
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21 Sep 2012
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Fabiola R
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I did my best... Day 1 : On Wednesday morning students embarked on a journey from Lenangen/ Lenangsstraumen, and from there we drove to Nordreisa and up Reisadalen to a place called Saraelv. There the boats were waiting for us and they took us about 20 km up the river. When the boats dropped us offwe had to cover on foot a distance of ,(I would have written: When we got off the boats, we walked... 3
km before we arrived at Nedrefosshytta � the tourist lodge where we were about to stay. Most of the first trip day was spent on getting to Saraelv, boat ride and walking to the cabin. As the evening drew closer it was high time for cooking. Shortly after, as soon as the students made a bonfire, we were barbecuing and enjoying the evening.
Day 2: The next day we headed up towards the mighty Mollisfossen. In the spring, when the snow melts, the height of the
waterfall rises up to 269
meters, which puts the waterfall right on the top in respect to other European waterfalls. On the way up to the valley towards Mollisfossen, the students as well as the teachers were fascinated by the stunning scenery and the steep mountain ridges. The ascent itself took us about two hours, but when we finally arrived at the place and saw the falls (comma) we realized that the two hours of climbing really paid off. On the top of the mountain we had lunch, took pictures and enjoyed ourselves. Having seen Mollisfossen we were ready for the descent towards Nedrefosshytta, where we stayed for the night. Once we safely arrived at the cabin, the students took to cooking and woodcutting. (began cooking and woodcutting)
Day 3: After two days in the beautiful scenery of Reisadalen we were ready to head (come back) home. We walked for about two kilometers down the river, and finally, we were picked up by the boats there. The boats took us safely down to Saraelv, where we were picked up by (took) a minibus and we were taken home to Nord Lenangen.
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21 Sep 2012
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jarek2011
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Thank you very much for your help Fabiola R ! |
21 Sep 2012
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