Dear Swissprof,
In my opinion, there are some commas missing, which I have inserted. Others may disagree with me.
Rapunzel
Once upon a time, a couple lived in a house next door to a witch. The wife longed to eat the lettuces in the witch �s beautiful garden.
The wife wanted the lettuces so much that her husband decided to steal them, but he was caught by the witch. "Have the lettuces, but as soon as you have a baby, you must give me your child when it is born."
The man was so scared that he agreed to everything she asked. When a little girl was born, the witch took her away and named her Rapunzel.
When Rapunzel grew up, the witch locked her away in a tower in the middle of a forest, with one window right at the top. Whilst Rapunzel lived in the tower, her golden hair grew longer and longer.
When the witch visited her, she would call, "Rapunzel! Rapunzel! Let down your long hair". Rapunzel let down her hair and the witch climbed up.
One day, a handsome Prince rode through the forest and found the tower. He heard singing and saw Rapunzel at the window. He watched the witch come to the tower and climb Rapunzel �s hair and decided to do the same.
The prince visited Rapunzel every day, but when the witch found out, she tricked the prince and threw him out of the tower. He fell on some thorns and scratched his eyes.
The prince was blind for a long time, until one day, he heard Rapunzel. When she saw it was her prince, she cried with happiness. Her tears touched his eyes and he could see again! They lived happily ever after in his kingdom.
" ... ... you must give me your child when she is born."
Who says that the baby will be a GIRL?
" ... ... you must give me your child when it is born."
"When the little girl was born, the witch took her away and named her Rapunzel."
THE little girl. WHICH little girl? We don �t know yet that the baby is a girl.
"When a little girl was born, the witch took her away and named her Rapunzel."
NOW, we know that a baby girl was born!
"Have the lettuces but as soon as you have a baby and you must give me your child when she is born."
"Have the lettuces, but as soon as you have a baby, you must give me your child when she is born." (There should be no �and � in this sentence.)
The tower is in the middle of a �forest�, yet the Prince rides through a �wood�, (which is considerably smaller than a forest).
This is a well-written story for children.
Les Douglas
