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Is the text OK?

MJ_Misa
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Is the text OK?
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Hi, it �s me again. I �m sorry for occupying the forum today but as I don �t do it very often I hope you won �t mind. I amm preparing a ws for my students for Past simple and Past continuous and I wrote this text:
Yesterday we decided to go to the beach because the weather was great. The sun was shining so we took our car and left
home. When we arrived to the beach there were a lot of people. We found a nice place near the sea and ran into the waves. Suddenly we saw three dolphins. They were swimming towards
us. At first we wanted to run out of the water but then
we changed our minds. The dolphins came to us and started
to play with our ball. Then they were throwing the ball to
Peter. It was fantastic. We
were throwing the ball to them and they were throwing it back to us. Then suddenly it
started to rain. We took the
ball and ran out of the water. The dolphins waved with their fins and swam
away. Later, when we were running to our car, a
lightening hit next to Sarah. Fortunately nothing
happened to her. We got safely home and were talking about the great adventure for the rest of the evening.
I would be happy if you could check possible mistakes because I �M not a native so I am sure they might be some.
Thank you once more for your help and have a great day,  Michaela
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13 May 2013
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cunliffe
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Nice passage, I �m teaching past cont at the mo, so I �ll use this, if you don �t mind.
When we arrived at the beach. The dolphins came up to us. Lightning struck ( �there was a lightning strike � is better) next to Sarah.
�We spent the rest of the evening talking � is better, but not necessary.
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13 May 2013
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dragonfly2
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I �m not a native speaker but here are my suggestions:
"arrived AT the beach", not "to the beach"
"We got safely home and TALKED about the great adventure for the rest of the evening."
Hope this is helpful,
Drragonfly2 |
13 May 2013
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yanogator
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Note that in Lynn �s correction, she has "Lightning struck...", not "A lightning", and that there �s no "e" in "lightning". Bruce |
13 May 2013
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MJ_Misa
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Thank you so much, you �re great, guys. 
@Lynn, you can have it tomorrow for free. ;-)
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13 May 2013
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